4.3 Feedback on Short Analysis papers + digging deeper into your data

I've returned the short analysis drafts with comments.  Overall they were well done!   This is your first draft and I was very impressed with how you selected material from your transcripts relevant to a focus and with the moves you made to analyze those excerpts to develop a focus.  Good writing!

In class, you volunteered (thank you) some of the points in your drafts that you were going to work on.

• Make stronger use of title and headings to focus + organize your writing
• Think about the sequence of the points: early points should set up later points, later points can refer back to and develop earlier points.
• Dig deeper into the data (the side comments should raise some ideas for ways to do this)
• Break up really long quotes.  Quote blocks longer than about 1/4 page are getting pretty long for the reader to take in.  You can shorten quotes by:
• excerpting quotes ( using // or . . . to indicate that sections or words have been left out)
• dividing long quotes into a series of related sections
• As you develop your discussion of what the transcript excerpts show, point to specific words or phrases in the excerpt
• Work on the intro + conclusion (we will spend time on this in class next week) 

The rest of class was devoted to working on analzying your data for your research project.  I am hoping you got your "analytic memos" for the data you posted to your blog for blog 17 analyzed by the end of class (the assignment for Blog 18), and I hope to have feedback for you on all writing up through Blog 18 by the beginning of next class.

To review the blog posts:

Blog 15: Short analysis paper

Blog 16: Revised research plan with notes for me in terms of what kind of support you need

Blog 17: data you plan to analyze, dig deeper into, for your research paper

Blog 18: analytic memos for the data posted for blog 17.

For class on April 8:

Read: Swales CARS (handed out in class)\

Find a research essay you can use to ground your introduction to your research project.

We will work on evaluating + writing introductions to research essays.

Have a great weekend!